A 2017 poem I revised. The prompt had something to do with a love poem. Revisions done: New title, multiple new lines, and word choice for clarity and context.
More than meets the eye on this one. It kind of breaks with the divorce line but then it picks up again and flows. Direct, honest and the true love is a quest. You'd think we all give the same interpretation on this one theme that unites. Your poem makes the reader think and that's a good thing. I am curious as to what the original looked like. Not that you have to share. Just wondered. Great work, Daniel!
The heart wants what the heart wants. No more no less. A rose wilts, hugs surround. Kiss affection. Love is a disease that catches you unaware.
Breathtaking, from start to finish, Daniel!
What an ending!
"Can anyone answer
what God won’t
and what time
dangles
but denies?"
More than meets the eye on this one. It kind of breaks with the divorce line but then it picks up again and flows. Direct, honest and the true love is a quest. You'd think we all give the same interpretation on this one theme that unites. Your poem makes the reader think and that's a good thing. I am curious as to what the original looked like. Not that you have to share. Just wondered. Great work, Daniel!
what God won’t
and what time
dangles
but denies?
What an ending, Daniel!!